P5

Evaluation of script:

What feedback did you agree with and why? - The feedback I agreed with the most for my script was to add a bit more action. To make the script seem intriguing to the reader,  I cut parts of the shop scene with John and Avinash and made it slightly snappier and so it won't bore the reader. Overall, most of the comments from peers who read my script couldn't find fault in my script, so I only changed one part of it.

What feedback did you disagree with and why? - The feedback that I disagree with was changing the main character's name as he was called John Smith to make him an Everyman figure. Another point I disagree is making my script seem happier. I couldn't find any parts to change in order to make it happier. However, I would consider the scene when John wins the lottery to be a pleasant scene.